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This really gomes slice for me at

“My love”

From there the eiti he is lush and sensuous, the longing palpable.

I prefer the new ending. I felt “lung song” was a bit gratuitous, maybe you could try some different qualifiers for “lullabies”.

Ending on lullabies makes me think you could frame the piece as a sleep spell for your lover to stay with you, but I’m getting too involved!